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how am i doing?

  • Great

    Votes: 5 50.0%
  • Good

    Votes: 4 40.0%
  • Okay

    Votes: 0 0.0%
  • Needs Work

    Votes: 1 10.0%

  • Total voters
    10
I don't really like it. Well I'll rate it like this:
Story:4/10- I don't like how new characters are introduced and they don't seem to put up much of a fight.
Grammer:2/10- Not much to it but It really needs work.
Writing style:2/10- Script is kinda poor quality.
Creativity:3/10- Not much is new, and not many new bad guys are introduced.

Overall:3/10- Needs alot of work.
 
you dont know wut i've been doing lately im extremlly busy and schools tarts for me tommorow wich lowers the chance of me getting alot of new chapters up with the grade 8 homework here unless i get a certain teacher i will be doing homework almost every day

TO ALL PEOPLE WHO READ THIS STORY OR HAVE STARTED TO

i am taking a break for a while i have school starting and im jus extremly tired lately i have been focusing all my atention on hacking a pokemon game and making videos of it but something hasnt been working so i have to find out the problem
 
how about i tall glass of shut the...ok i cant rele say the rest or if i do i will get ban but seriously i need a break
 
i never said i dont have time and if i did then that is now incorect i have a good teacher without homework i said i am out of ideas and need a break
 
ok the next chapter will be up on saturday cuz i am about to leev for the grade 8 camping trip peace :)
 
ok i am rele busy so if any of you people who read this its guna come soon mods plz dont lock
 
here it is the long awaited chapter:

Chapter 14: Different Directions

Solana: sighs how could this happen?
Seth: Why can’t you just get over it has been over a week we will get him back
Solana: how?!?! You just said it has been over a week they have probably restored his memory so he won't ever come back now
Tory: then I guess we should try to find him then
Tia: but how? We have no idea where their base is we have checked the relic, the factory, and kroka tunnel they arent anywhere there
Seth: it’s like they have completely disappeared
???: there is one person that might have an idea
Solana: huh?…Murph? where have ou been I thought you disappeared a year ago
Murph: I did…I was taken hostage by the new leader of the Go Rock Squad
All of them: what?
Solana: how did you escape?
Murph: when they left the relic they left me behind
Tory: I’ll call Spencer and the others
Murph: NO!…ummm don’t bother them I am sure they are doing something important but anyways, Gordor he would know something he used to be the leader
Tia: I guess that would work
Seth: why don’t we check the base in the mountains?
Solana: are you kidding I was there recently to see how the pokemon were doing and it was completely deystroyed
Murph: but here is the thing they are planing to attack ringtown and completely take control by tearing it all down and rebuilding in their honor but Fall City is unguarded so that’s three tasks and four of you
Solana: We have to get moving fast I will stop them from taking Ringtown Tory and Tia you two go to Fall City Seth you go back to the relic and check for anything they left behind
***********************They all leave*******************
*an image suddenly comes up on the screen*
Jin: did it work?
Murph: yup they have left the town unguarded attack in about 10 minutes master
Jin: thank you Murph you have helped us a lot
 
ash ketchup said:
can i be in?

name chris
occupation: a guy you can call on if you're ever in a real tight fix
partner pokemon: absol

oh crap i forgot to get you in lol
 
Can I be in it?

Name: Matt
Occupation: Loves to battle tough opponents and tries to find more people to crush down in battles. Is also A little arrogant. He also helps out his friends when their in trouble.
Partner pokemon: Combusken
KeybladePokemon said:
CD your not suppose to swear on this forum

In cd's defence, saying crap is not swearing. Crap Crap Crap.
 
number 1: no you cant be in i alredy have all the characters i can take
number 2: thnk you for backing me up
 
collidingdragons said:
number 1: no you cant be in i alredy have all the characters i can take
number 2: thnk you for backing me up

Oh thats okay. And yourwelcome.
 
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