Writing The Birth of an Articuno. Chapter Ten is in!

[MUCKSTER]

Before I start with my story I would like to say a few things.
First off the main charactor in my story is a girl, and I am not, I thought a girl fit the part I am giving her much better than a guy would have.
Here is a picture of the main charactor:

This is also my first Fan Fic so any suggestions are highly appreciated.
Anyone who wants to be in my Fan Fic I will try to fit in, some people will obviosly bigger parts than others. If you are not in for a while do not complane or I WILL go back and edit you out of my story. Here is the form

Name/Nickname:
Pokemon:
Looks?:
Minibio:
I may devolve your pokemon and evolve then later. I also want the looks because I may make TCs of everyone, depeneding on how much time I have. A mini bio is also very nice to help me involve your charactor more.
I may not be able to post a new chapter alot, there is an evil thing I like to call school. As you all know it comes first.
Thanks for reading my story and I hope you all like it!

EDIT: Here is a Directory, just click on the chapter you want to read!
Ch 2 A new Friend
Ch 3 More Changes!
Ch 4 Future Behold
Ch 5 Save Poochyena!
Ch 6 We Return!
Ch 7 Saved!
Ch 8 Time to Go!
Ch 9 More Members!



PS The first couple paragraphs acually did happen to me, includeing their age and them being named Thunder and Lightning.

Ch 1: A New World?
That night started off in a way I was not happy about, but it ended as the most amazing night of my life. Ever since I was little I remember having Thunder flying around my house. Thunder was my pet parakeet. Some of you may know that the average life span of a parakeet is four to six years. My Thunder was a very different story. Thunder has been alive for 12 years, and now those twelve years are up. Her life ended after having what we believed as a stroke. That is what we thought at the time.
Thunder looked fine until the night she died, then poof she was gone. My Dad and I went into the backyard to place Thunder next to Lightning, who we got at the same time. Lightning died two years before Thunder, which was also much longer than normal. After the mini funeral I went up to my room and went immediately asleep.
I was not having a very peaceful sleep; I was tossing and turning all night long. Through my eyelids I saw a blue light. I opened my eyes to see none other than Thunder hovering over me! All I could think was that I was just dreaming. Then
"Alex, wake up."

I must be dreaming.

"Wake up Alex."

There is no way I am awake.

"Please wake up."
I opened my eyes again and Thunder was still floating there.
"You can not me real." I said.

Thunder responded, "You don't beleave I am real, but I truly am."

As I said this I looked closer I noticed a slight blue glow around her, she must be a ghost!
"Why have you come back?"

"I have come back for you to help me."

"Help you with what?"

"I'm not entirely sure yet. All I know is that it is my duty to take someone with me to my true world to help me and all who live there."

"Your world? What do you mean by that?"

"All I know is that I am supposed to possess someone and take them with me to this other world."

"How do you do you?"
Before I could finish my sentence Thunder's ghost flew into me. I felt very dizzy as everything started spinning.
This must bee a dream, I kept thinking to myself, but it feels too real. I felt the spinning stop, I slowly opened my eyes. I was in the middle of a forest. I was still disoriented but I noticed that I was no longer in my pajamas. I was wearing a white loose shirt and a green skirt, everything else felt the same.
But not everything is the same.

"Who said that?"

I did, it is Thunder, I am in your head.

"Well I guess I wasn’t dreaming."

Yea you weren't.
I stood up and I saw a small black and grey dog. It was only about 10 feet away. It almost looks like a Poochyena!
Look out!
All of a sudden I was side swiped by something. A mother Mightyena tackled me! All I could think was to run. I got up as quick as I could and took off in the opposite direction. The Mightyena was too fast. She caught me very quickly and tackled me again. When the mother was about to bight me a beam of light came out of nowhere and knocked Mightyena away. All Mightyena could do was turn around and return to her baby.
We were lucky for that beam that saved us.
“But who was it?”
I heard a mysterious voice from behind me, 'It was me."

 

[Brett]

RE: The Birth of an Articuno. Looking for Trainers!

good start.

 

[Moneyking63]

RE: The Birth of an Articuno. Looking for Trainers!

Looking pretty good

Name/Nickname:Matt
Pokemon:Empoleon, Raichu, Flygon, Ninetales, Dewgong, Furret
Looks?: hmm well ill give u this sprite hows that?

Minibio: Matt always has a plan and is very smart. He tries to use brains over brawn but sometimes when time is nessacery he will risk everything to help someone. Matt has a great love for all pokemon but has a special place in his heart for water pokemon! They are his true passion, that and the ocean!!

 

[MUCKSTER]

RE: The Birth of an Articuno. Looking for Trainers!

Ok cool I will try to fit it in!
I am also going to write my next chapter tonight

 

[Moneyking63]

RE: The Birth of an Articuno. Looking for Trainers!

Ok cool, i know how hard it is to fit in some characters when you already have ur main people! good luck i like the fan fic!! cant wait for the next chapter

 

[gamercal]

RE: The Birth of an Articuno. Looking for Trainers!

My only suggestion right now is that you try and space out the speech a bit more... like instead of:

“Alex, wake up.”
I must be dreaming.
“Wake up Alex.”
There is no way I am awake.
“Please wake up.”

You would have:

“Alex, wake up.”

I must be dreaming.

“Wake up Alex.”

There is no way I am awake.

“Please wake up.”


This makes it easier to read and follow what's going on. It's not absolutely necessary persay, but it helps the reader.

Hope this helps you! Keep up the good work, I'll be sure to read the next chapter when it's done

 

[MUCKSTER]

RE: The Birth of an Articuno. Looking for Trainers!

My only suggestion right now is that you try and space out the speech a bit more... like instead of:

“Alex, wake up.”
I must be dreaming.
“Wake up Alex.”
There is no way I am awake.
“Please wake up.”

You would have:

“Alex, wake up.”

I must be dreaming.

“Wake up Alex.”

There is no way I am awake.

“Please wake up.”


This makes it easier to read and follow what's going on. It's not absolutely necessary persay, but it helps the reader.

Hope this helps you! Keep up the good work, I'll be sure to read the next chapter when it's done

Nice suggestion, ill go up and fix that
Does that look better?
Also when I edited I got a whole bunch of these little boxes ”whats up witht that?

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Heres the second chapter, Its going to pick up very soon!

The Birth of an Articuno
Ch 2 A new Friend
I turned around to see a short man with darker hair and ragged clothes standing with a Dragonite.
“Hello, my name is Kale.”

“Thank you for saving us, I mean me,” I responded.

“It was no problem but what are you doing out here?”

“Ummm, where is here exactly?”

“This would be Viridian forest, my home. Here I doubt it will work but here I have a super potion, it is supposed to work only on pokemon but it is worth a shot,” Kale Grabbed a red squirt bottle out of his backpack. “This may sting a little.” He sprayed a small amount of the potion on my arm and it healed instantly!

“Wow, that is good medicine.”

“This is only supposed to work on pokemon,” Kale said confused,

“Why do you live in the woods?”

“Well, before we get into a long winded conversation, I think we need to get away from here before more Mightyenas show up.”

I think we can trust him

“What makes you think that?” I said to Thunder.

“Well the fact that we just made the largest pack of Mightyenas in the area,” Kale answered confused.

“Oh no, I was just talking to the voice in my head.”

“Okkkkaaayyy… lets just get moving.”

Kale and I worked our way through the thick woods encountering many Weedles, Caterpies and other pokemon. Thunder and I were tempted to ask Kale where they were going, but decided to keep quiet to avoid more Mightyenas. After almost 30 minutes of traveling through bush and brook, they arrived at a small shack.
“This is my home,” Kale said with a smile.

“Its, its… very nice?” I commented trying to sound nice.

It’s a DUMP!

“Well that wasn’t very kind of you,” I said to Thunder.

“Not kind? I’m letting you in my house!” Kale said angrily.

“Oh sorry it was my voice in my head again; I’ll explain when we get inside.”
Kale opened the door slowly to show a small room. Inside the room there was a cast iron stove, a pile of leaves for a bed, a stack of 5 pokeballs in the corner, and a small box with food in it.

“Welcome to El motel de Kale.” He said sarcastically.

“Nice.”

“Don’t worry, it gets more homely; come on out everyone.”
Kale throws his 5 pokeballs and an Ursaring, Blastoise, Blaziken, Dragonite, and Aggron appeared with a flash of light.
“Wow,” I said in amazement.

“They’re not all that great.”

“No, they really are, I have never seen real pokemon like this before. Other than the ones that were trying to kill me. They’re amazing!”

This all seems so familiar, like I have seen many pokemon like this before.
Kale then walked over to the box with food in it and grabbed some pokefood and started handing it out to his pokemon. “It’s not much but this is what I usually feed all my pokemon. I usually just go outside and find some food. Right now it is too dark to go outside to find any so this is all we have. Do you want some?”

“I’m so hungry right now I don’t care what I eat.”

Remember your feeding two in here now.

“I know I know, oh sorry voice in my head again,” I said embarrassed.

“How about this, I will give you some food, if you tell me more about this voice in your head. Are you skitz or something?”

“No, but I am something.”

So then I spent the next several minutes explaining what happened to me.
“Is this all true?” Kale asked skeptically.

“Yes, as far as we know. We have no idea what is going to happen next, or what we should do.”

“It’s ok, I didn’t exactly have the most normal life ever either.”

“What happened to you?”

“Well…”

“WAIT!” I yelled.

“What?”

“Can I have some of that pokefood now, I’m starving.”

“Oh sure.” Kale said as he handed me several small pellets and I popped them in my mouth.

“These are GREAT!”

“WHAT? I eat a lot of things but I don’t even like that pokefood, you are a strange one.”

“I don’t know what but it just has the perfect blend of tastes, where do you get it?”

“I make it myself.”

“You’re a very good chef; now could you tell me about your life.”

“Ok, well this is the story of my life in short. When I was younger my parents both disappeared. I was too young to know anything about them, but I was sent to an orphanage. I couldn’t stand it there. When I was seven I managed to escape and I met my good friend Blastoise here. Then, of course, he was a squirtle but I trained him up to a wartortle after only several days, and then blastoise the next day after being stolen and escaping from some evil villains. Blastoise and I went everywhere together; we ended up catching everyone you see here. Each of them trained to their max evolutions. We are just one big family.”

“Wow, what a life. I could never live in a place like this, no offense, for very long.”

“Oh no offense taken. I never stay here very long, that is how I have so many different pokemon, I’ve been everywhere.”

“I don’t know about you but I’m feeling tired, I need to go to bed.” I said with a yawn.

“Yea, I’m bushed also. Before we go to bed though, I have a gift.”

“A gift for what?” I said confused.
“Well, you just got sent here and I thought it would be appropriate to give you these.” Kale walked over to the corner with the pokeballs stacked up. “Here catch.”
Kale tossed me the 5 pokeballs. “You’ll need these to live here.”

Wow that is very nice.

“Are you sure? These are all the spares you have left.”

“I’m sure, I have the last pokeball on me that I will ever need, don’t worry.”

“Well, only if you’re sure you don’t need them.”

I have a good feeling about this world. I think everything will work out fine.

“I do, too, Thunder, this is just the beginning, though,” I whispered. “Good night Kale, I will be fine on the floor, considering it is your house.”

Sleeping that night was very restless, and I kept waking up from a searing pain in my forehead.

 

[gamercal]

RE: The Birth of an Articuno. Chaper Two is in!

Wow, that was a definite stroke of fortune for your heroine there! If that guy hadn't come along...

The layout is a lot better now, so you know. It's a lot easier to keep track of what line you're on now. Before, I'd sometimes miss a line that was important to read because they were all so close together -_-. Just don't forget spacing between paragraphs as well! It's not just speech that sets spaces between different speakers... paragraphs are also separated by a line normally

Anyways, grammer-picking aside (I'm hardly an expert after all), good job with that chapter; I'm officially keenly interested in what goes on with this now! Let's just hope Thunder doesn't decide to take over Alex's mind completely... although somehow I doubt that'll happen

 

[Brett]

RE: The Birth of an Articuno. Chaper Two is in!

Great job in the second chap. It left me on the edge of my seat!

 

[MUCKSTER]

RE: The Birth of an Articuno. Chaper Two is in!

Sweet, nice to know that people like it, my friend sentme a list of typos I'm going to have to fix later, but right now I have homework to do, I'm going to try to write the next chapter tonight but depends on that dang homework thing again.
Also I'm starting a poll on how much you like it 1=least 10=best youve ever read
I'm not expecting many 10s lol
EDIT:
I just edited my 2nd chapter and I have an ffical editor joinign me cambowegian217! Im going to type the chapter, check it, post it. Then cambowegian will proofread it for other errors.
I am about to start typeing the next chapter, not sure if i will finish it sence the STEELERS ARRE ON WOOT

EDIT: Finished the next chapter, this one is leading up to something HUGE

Ch 3 More Changes!

That night was a night of almost no sleep. All night I just kept feeling this searing pain in my head. Once I fell sleep I had the craziest dream, I was floating in an enclosed place, covered in snow and frozen in ice. Then I had the strangest feeling that everything was getting colder. Then I was awoken by a scream!

“Who, what!?” I yelled as I sat up.

It seemed much colder. I looked around me and I noticed everything looked exactly as my dream did. The only difference is that Kale and all the other things in the cabin are visible under the ice. Kale’s head is the only thing that is uncovered by ice.

“Who did this?” I said being very frightened.

“You did!” Kale responded.

“But how! I was asleep the entire time!”

“You are the only thing in the cabin unfrozen and the ice seems to spread away from you. Don’t worry though, just run down to Viridian City and buy a couple ice heals, tell them I sent you and I will pay them back. Just make sure you hurry.”

“Okay, I will be back ASAP.”

With that I sprinted out of the cabin and ran towards Viridian, luckily there is a path this time.

How could you have done that?

“I’m not entirely sure I was asleep the entire time.”

It must have something to do with me. I do remember something though

“What do you remeb…”

Before I could finish my sentence I was slammed from the side! It was the Mightyena again. This time, though, I felt stronger; I could throw her off of me. It was a standoff between the mother and me.

“Stay away from my babies!”

With that the Mightyena attacked. I dodged her and tackled her from the side.

Did you just hear what I did?

“Yes I did, but not the time!”

The mother then sent me flying with a dark wave of energy. It must have been a dark pulse. I hit a tree and fell to the ground. The Mightyena walked up to me.

“This will teach you to steal my babies.”

“I didn’t though!”

She opened her mouth wide to finish me with a powerful crunch attack. Then, another lucky break! A mass of leaves came flying through striking the mother.

“She is not the one who stole your children,” the voice came from somewhere to the left; I could not see my savior.”

“Who did then!” The mother roared.

“A man and a woman wearing matching uniforms,” my savior replied.

“I believe you, but only because of how you helped me before. But what is this intruder doing here?”

“I do not know, maybe you should ask her, she seems to understand us.”

“I don’t know anything really,” I replied before the Mightyena could ask me. “But right now I need to get to Viridian City to help my friends.”

“Okay, I will let you pass, as long as you promise to help my babies.”

“I will do whatever I can,” I responded shakily.

“I will come with you so you do not get attacked again,” My rescuer said as he revealed himself.

“Thank you Bulbasaur, thanks a lot.”

With that, Mightyena moved out of our way as we ran quickly to Viridian city. The rest of the distance we were not bothered; Bulbasaur seemed to have an influence on the surrounding pokemon.

“What did you remember?” I whispered to Thunder.

Not much all I remember is we need to get to the Orange islands to find out what is truly going on.

After almost 15 minutes of running we arrived at the Pokemart in Viridian.

I burst into the store and yelled, “I need several ice heals for my friend, and quick!”

“Calm down,” the shop owner said, “I don’t have any ice heals in stock. I believe that Professor Oak has some at his lab in Pallet Town.”

What type of pokemart doesn’t have any ice heals?”

With that Bulbasaur and I sprinted out of the door. I was starting to get tired from all the running, Bulbasaur did not seem to get winded at all. Luckily for the final part of the run Bulbasaur knew a shortcut over a small ledge and that saved us a lot of time.

I think that Oak’s lab is that building.

“How do you know that?” I whispered.

I just have a feeling, like I’ve been here before.

We turned towards the large building and threw the doors open.

“I need to speak to Professor Oak.”

“Who are you?” One of the aids responded.

“My name is Alex and I need to speak to the Professor now!”

“Okay, okay. I’ll get him.”

After several minutes, Oak came out of his office. “Hello my name is Professor Oak, what do you need that is so urgent?”

“My friend Kale got frozen in his cabin with all his pokemon and I need ice heals to get him out and the pokemart was out and they told me to come here and”

“Wait a second. Calm down. I have plenty of ice heals, Kale will be fine. I know him quite well.”

“Oh thank you so much.”

“I will even fly up there with you on my Pidgeot to the shack. I just need to know, where did you get that beautiful hair piece you have on?”

“What hair piece?”

“You mean you don’t know you have one on?” I shook my head. “Here let me show you, here is a mirror.

I turned to the mirror and saw myself and screamed!

 

[Negative Zero]

RE: The Birth of an Articuno. Chaper Three is in!

What happened to chapter 2 On my computer you only wrote one sentence

 

[MUCKSTER]

RE: The Birth of an Articuno. Chaper Three is in!

What happened to chapter 2 On my computer you only wrote one sentence

Woaaa, I dont know, I just edited it earlyer, Ill go fix that now!
OK I got it now, the entire thign shoudl be there now

 

[gamercal]

RE: The Birth of an Articuno. Chaper Three is in!

Woah, ok... the mystery of the hairpiece.. well, that's sure different

It DOES sound cool though, so that's a good thing. Keep at it!

Oh, and yay for editors! Always helpful for making sure that you get things right yes?

 

[MUCKSTER]

RE: The Birth of an Articuno. Chaper Three is in!

It is diffrent, but it is HUGE
I'm about to type up the next chapter

 

[gamercal]

RE: The Birth of an Articuno. Chaper Three is in!

well, I'll await the arrival of the next chapter, hoping it will shed some light on the hairpiece thing...

These things are helping to keep me sane during my exam revision, so I'm glad you people are dedicated enough to work on these! It helps more than you might think

 

[MUCKSTER]

RE: The Birth of an Articuno. Chaper Three is in!

I finished Chapter four, I explane alot of things in this capter especially showing how I am goign to be useing lots of sprites for the contest.

Ch 4
Future Behold

What is that?

On my head sprouting from my forehead was a blue, almost gem looking crystal. It was stuck to my head onto my skin. I pulled and pulled and it would not come off.

“What is this thing!” I screamed.

“It almost looks like the crown from an Articuno,” Oak responded.

“How did it get here, and why is it fused with my head!”

“I do not know but maybe it has something to do with how Kale became frozen in ice. Here let us go to his cabin and free him to find out.”

We left the house quickly and Oak sent out his Pidgeot. We both climbed on. Right before we left I heard.

“Let me come too!”

It was Bulbasaur. I hoisted him up between Oak and me and we took off.

“Tell me everything that has happened to you recently. You obviously are not the average girl.”

“This is what happened,” I told him everything from Thunder dieing in my world to me understanding the pokemon speaking to the Mightyena’s attack.

“It looks like you Thunder is not just a normal bird. It seems that Thunder is actually an Articuno,” Oak replied after mulling it over.

WHAT!

“I guess that makes sense. The freezing, the thing on my head, it all makes sense.”

“How the legendary pokemon has breed as been a mystery sense the dawn of pokemon, it sounds like the Articuno are breeding through you.”

So that is why I needed to possess you. I needed someone to take me to the Orange Islands to be reborn. It’s all coming back now.

“According to Thunder, we need to go to the Orange Islands for her to be reborn.” I told Oak.

“Interesting… Here is Kale’s cabin up here let’s go down.”

We landed and jumped off Pidgeot, who Oak returned, and ran towards the cabin.

“Took you long enough, I’ve lost feeling in all my body. Oh you brought the professor,” Kale said shaking.

“Yes, the pokemart was out of ice heals. The shop owner sent Alex to me to get the ice heals.”

“Okay enough talk, get me out!”

So using several ice heals we got Kale out and the pokeball holding his Blaziken, who used a weak emeber to melt the ice away.

“Oh we have some interesting news,” I announced to Kale.

“Let me guess, something to do with that thing on your head and freezing me?”

“Good guess,” Oak replied. “We believe Thunder is actually an Articuno. She needed to possess someone in order to be born, it seems this is all part of an Articuno lifecycle.”

“Also I kind of made a promise on the way to Viridian. It seems with Thunder inside me, I can understand pokespeak. I kinda promised to save the Mightyena’s children. They were stolen from her.”

“You did? But she attacked you!” Kale yelled.

“Twice actually, I got a little help though. Bulbasaur saved me.”

Hearing his name Bulbasaur walked in the door.

He looked up at me and said, “I have been thinking; it is obvious you will be a strong trainer. I want you to try to catch me.”

“What did he say Alex?” Kale asked.

“He wants me to try to catch him, and now it seems. I accept Bulbasaur, let’s go outside. Please Kale do not use any of your pokemon to help me; I need to do this myself.”

Bulbasaur walked out the door and I followed. We lined up opposite of each other in the small clearing outside the shack.

“Don’t hold back Bulbasaur.”

With that he attacked. He started off with a powerful vine whip which wrapped me around the waist. He threw me up in the air and tried to slam me agaisnt the ground. He let go before his vines hit the ground. My feet hit first and I rolled out of the impact. I stood up and charged Bulbasaur. He shot a razor leaf at me which I almost didn’t get out of the way. I lowered my shoulder and hit him. He went flying into a bush, then vines came out of the bush, but went blind left and I grabbed one. I started to pull him out when the vines turned and grabbed me again and threw me into a tree. The pain was unbearable. I knew then that there was only way I could beat him. I needed to use the move that I froze Kale with earlier. I tried to remember how I used the move when Bulbasaur launched another attack. It was a take down; he was going to try to end it. I moved quickly to the left and he nipped me on the side.
I then remembered what happened right before I froze everyone. I visualized the area around me coated in snow, I felt the power run through me. I was doing it! I could feel the air getting colder fast and when I opened my eyes a wall of snow flew past me towards Bulbasaur. It hit him head on and sent him flying into the shack. I used powder snow! He fell down the ground. I threw my pokeball. It hit, and sucked him inside. The pokeball started to shake back and forth. The shaking slowed down, and then… DING! I caught Bulbasaur!

“I DID IT I DID IT!” I yelled at the top of my lungs.

Great job Alex!

“Congratulations Alex on your first pokemon!” Oak said.

“That was a great battle Alex. Great job.” Kale complemented.

“Come on out Bulbasaur.”

“Good job Alex, you caught me fair and square,” even Bulbasaur was happy. “Would you like to nickname me Alex, I feel we can become closer that way.”

“Of course!” I responded overjoyed. “I always thought that the best name for a Bulbasaur would be Forest. How does that sound to you?”

“I think it is a great name thank you!” Forest replied.

Just then we heard a faint bark from the trees. We all ran in to see Mightyena lying on the ground, injured.

“Please help. I tried to save Poochyena by myself…”




Ok guys cambowegian217 is officially not my proofreader. I will be DQed if I add someone to my team now so I will be typeing, quick proofread, post, close proofread. And I may get behind in my proofreading I just figuered it would make you guys happyer to read the story sooner

 

[MUCKSTER]

RE: The Birth of an Articuno. Chapter Five is in!

New chapter, I need to read over it again for grammer but i need sleep... Here it is!

Ch 5
Save Poochyena!

“Please save them, those people were too strong,” Mightyena begged.

“We will Mightyena, we will,” I responded.

“They are going to do something horrible to them, I know it. Please hurry.”

“Guys we have to get moving. The Poochyenas are in trouble.”

“Sadly, I can not come,” Oak said with remorse. “I am too old, even this small trip and watching you catch Forest tired me.”

“It is ok Oak, we can go alone. We’ll be fine,” Kale said confidently.

“Just be careful, I will be waiting back at my lab. I will look forward to your arrival. Before you go here are some super potions to heal you and Forest.”

“Thank you Professor, we’ll see you later!”

Oak sent out Pidgeot and flew off. I approached Mightyena and asked where the Poochyenas were.

“They are in Viridian City’s old gym,” Mightyena told me and I translated.

“Okay, thank you, we will be back as soon as possible with your babies,” Kale told her reassuringly.

Kale and I went off towards Viridian City. I kept Forest outside of his pokeball so the surrounding pokemon would not attack us. After a short walk we came to the building, it was a single story, with rundown looking, well just about everything. I pulled hard on the door and it did not budge.

“Here let me help you with that, Aggron use Iron Head on that door!”

In the flash of the pokeball Aggron appeared and hit the door hard. He used too much force and the door flew across the room!

“Venomoth use tackle!”

A large Venomoth flew infront of me and hit Kale head on!

“Forest use Vine Whip!” I yelled.

Forest’s vine flew out and hit the Venomoth hard. Venomoth went flying back into his trainer, knocking him backwards.

“Who are you?” Zale yelled, still dazed.

“I am Jarm,” a short woman said. She was wearing a black and brown uniform. “And this is Jynx! Use doubleslap!”

The Jynx hit Forest hard. It is obvious that this is a well trained pokemon. Forest hopped back to his feat quickly.

“Forest use razor leaf!”

“Jynx dodge and use powder snow!”

“Dodge Forest!” but I was too late. It nailed him head on and knocked him out. My first fainted pokemon. “Return Forest. I’ll get you!” I yelled at Jarm.

“No Alex, let me get her. Aggron use metal sound!”

Aggron let loose the loudest metal ping, I ever heard in my life. I was a super effective hit! Jynx flew right into the wall. Fell to the ground knocked out.

“That’s not all I have, go Shiftry!”

Alex that’s a grass pokemon!

“Kale I got this one,” Ok envision Shiftry frozen in ice, come on. I have to do it. Everything got colder and then I opened my eyes. Whoosh! A large pack of snow flew past be and hit Jarm. Jarm went flying into the wall and through it! I ran outside through the hole and saw Jarm on the ground with Shifty next to her. All of a sudden, BANG, a large cloud of smoke appeared where Jarm was. A man dropped down in front of the smoke.

“If you are the one that did this, you will pay. We will be back for you later small fry.” Just then a Lopunny fell down from above grabbed them both and bounced away.

“Those must have been the people who took the Poochyena. We have to find them.” Kale said.

Kale sent out all his pokemon and ordered them to look for the Poochyena. Kale and I stayed in the main area. Then we heard Ursaring yell for us. Everyone ran to where he was searching and we found him, and something else. There was a man bound and gagged. We untied him quickly to find him unconscious. In the corner there was a small cabinet in the corner. It has a lock on it.

Kale ordered Blastoise to use brick break on the lock. It blasted open and we found 6 pokeballs inside in glass cases. We broke each pokeball case open and released the pokemon. Inside them there was a Metagross, Charizard, Froslass, Electivire, Milotic, and a Lucario. They all seemed dazed and underfed. Frolass noticed her master unconscious and used Wake-Up slap on him.

“Who, wa?” The man said. “What happened?”

“We found you tied up and found your pokemon in the cabinet over there,” Kale explained.

“Wow, all I remember is being tied up, and some weird gas being sprayed on me. Oh I’m sorry my name is Ace.”

“Nice to meet you Ace. Do you think you can walk, we came here to find some Poochyena that were stolen from their mother. I have a bad feeling about this place,” I said.

I have a feeling. If we open the door that is next door to this room, we will find the Poochyena.

“Thunder has an idea Kale, let’s try one more door down.”

“Who is Thunder?” Ace questioned.

“We’ll explain later.” Kale commented.

So we left the room to find next door to find the Poochyena! Once again though we found something else. The room was filled with Electrodes! The electrodes started to glow and shake. The Poochyena were right in the middle.

“Oh no! Blastoise get in there and use protect! Aggron you use it around us!” Kale ordered. They both sprang into action and both used protect in time. There was a humongous explosion. As the smoke cleared we saw that the Poochyena were saved and so was everyone else.

We’re going to have to tell Nurse Joy about these electrodes.

“I don’t think we’ll have to tell Nurse Joy about this. Half the building is gone! Lets get out of here and return the Poochyena.”

We walked out of the remnants of the gym. We walked back to the shack where we found Mightyena waiting.

“Oh thank you, you found them! How will I ever repay you?”

“Just don’t attack any strangers without proper reason ok?” I told her.

“We should probably go to Oaks lab to tell him,” Kale said.

“Here I can help with that,” Ace said proudly. “Here I think Metagross has enough energy left to teleport us to Oaks. Come on out and use teleport Metagross!” With in an instant we were outside Oak’s lab. “He can only teleport to somewhere he has been before, it helps a lot though.”

We walked inside to see Oak waiting. We were about to tell him what happened when he told us.

“Please not tonight, I think I have had enough excitement for one day. Here you all can sleep in the lab.”

We were each shown into a large room with 3 large beds in it,

“This is much nicer than your shack Kale.” I commented.

“Yes I know. But it is home.”

“Now can you please tell me who Thunder is? It has been bugging me the entire time,” Ace begged.

I let Kale tell the story this time, as I drifted off to sleep. I had trouble sleeping on my back that night, but it was much more conferrable than last time.

 

[gamercal]

RE: The Birth of an Articuno. Chapter Five is in!

Pretty cool stuff... I didn't expect to see 2 chapters when I next looked! Very nice...

You've developed the story pretty well so far - it's really easy to follow what's going on. That's great for the reader of course because you can enjoy a story you understand much more than one you don't. I also like how you threw the concept of how a pokemon does its attacks into the mix - visualising what effect the attack will have on the opponent. Good stuff!

Too bad about not being able to have a proof-reader... but you don't really make too many mistakes anyhow, so it's not the end of the world. Maybe running a spellchecker in word could pick out most of the few typos, but you'd have to go through the story yourself (more or less) to pick out any other kind of error. Still, as I said before you don't make a lot of mistakes from what I can tell so you're fine as it is

As always I look forward to the next chapter!

 

[MUCKSTER]

RE: The Birth of an Articuno. Chapter Five is in!

I did not feel like writeing the next chapter tonight so I made the sprites for Ace and Kale!
here they are

that is Kale

This is Ace

Im going to try to make their TCs tonight also, I need to catch more pokemon on Alex first before I make a card.

EDIT: I just finished Ace's TC, it is my first TC ever! I like it alot personally

EDIT:EDIT:
Just finished Kale's TC, I like the othe one better

 

[MUCKSTER]

RE: The Birth of an Articuno. Chapter Five is in!

I just finished a new chapter, this one has a real cliffhanger!

Ch 6
We Return.

I feel as if I am floating among the clouds. The feeling of weightlessness is amazing. I am flying with no effort at all. I can feel myself losing altitude. I break through the clouds and I can see Pallet Town and Viridian City. I begin to close in more on Viridian. I move in on the old gym. It lost about half of its structure from the explosion. I stop on the roof and feel that I am looking for something. I see the area where the ground is scorched from the electrodes. I fly towards it. I fly straight towards where the Poochyena were huddled together. I fly through the ground where they were. I am in a dark dank room. Then… a pokeball flies out of nowhere and hits me and everything goes black.

I sit up in my bed back in Oak’s lab. What a dream.

I think it was telling us to go back where to the gym.

I look at the clock and it is 2:00 AM. “Not now,” I whispered. “Too early we can go later.” I have a sudden urge to go to the bathroom. Everything seemed to be enthralled in a deep, thick mist. I got up and walked out the door. I remember where the bathroom was from the night before when I went before bed. I turned left out of the door and walked to the bathroom on the right.

I opened the door and closed it behind me, then, “OWWWW!!” A sharp pain emanates from my lower back.

“Who? What is it?,” Kale said as he pulled open the door. “What is with this fog?”

I flick on the light so I see.

I have a TAIL! I hear more footsteps from down the hall, Ace and Oak come in.

“What hap…? OH MY GOD!” Ace yelled.

“So the changes progress,” Oak said calmly. “It seems that every night you will become more and more like an Articuno, until eventually, you will become one.”

I’m sorry Alex I had no clue.

“It is okay. What is done is done right,” I responded. “I had a vision last night. I think there is a basement or something. I’m not entirely sure; I woke up right after I found it in my dream.”

“Wow a lot of weird stuff happens to you guys huh?” Ace retorted.

“Yea. We’re not really used to it,” Kale responded.

“Well I believe it is far too early to go on any investigations. We should all go back to sleep and get to it in the morning,” Oak said.

“You’re right. What am I supposed to do with this tail?”

“Keep it of course,” Oak said wittingly.

With that we all headed back to our rooms and went back to sleep. I had a harder time sleeping with my tail, but I got in a comfortable position on my stomach and fell asleep.

When we all woke up in the morning one of Oak’s assistances gave us some bacon and eggs. Kale ate them with a lot of vigor as he usually dines on berries and roots.

“I was thinking last night; I would like to travel with you guys,” Kale suddenly said. “I have been wondering around by myself for a long time now. I get very lonely and I would like someone to go with.”

“Of course you can!” I yelled.

“The more the merrier I always say!” Kale said happily.

“Now this is more like it. Everyone is happy and full now,” Oak said as he burst into the room. “Also we have a little group now, this is great.”

Don’t forget the dream.

“We still can’t forget my dream last night guys. I think we need to go investigate that,” I reminded them.

“You’re right. We should leave now,” Ace said.

“If you two are ready I am,” Kale responded.

We gave Oak’s assistants our dishes, and walked outside. Ace sent out Charizard and Kale sent out Dragonite. They both mounted them and there was no room for me on either.

“Don’t worry you can borrow Pidgeot for the ride. She’ll just fly back here after the ride.”

Oak sent Pidgeot out in a flash and I climbed aboard. The others kicked off the ground and Pidgeot followed. I was having the same sensation as I was having in my dream. The clouds, the flying feeling, the only difference was I could feel Pidgeot underneath me. We descended slowly towards the gym and it looked the same as it did in my dream.

This is almost surreal.

We landed outside the room that the Electrode were in. The door and the frame around it were the only things intact thanks to Kale’s protect. We walked into the room and Ace asked me, “So where was the door you saw?”

“The door was right about… here.” I said as I walked towards the un-scorched area. I felt around, “It has to be here somewhere. Forest help me look.” As I sent out Forest. He used his vine whip to feel around the ground. He found a ledge.

“It is too heavy for me to lift,” Forest told me. “I need help.”

“Here Aggron will help,” as Kale sent out his pokemon. Aggron lifted the grate easily. I climbed down the latter, and stepped on the bottom. The basement smelled of rotting, well everything. I found a light switch on the wall and flicked it on.

It was very disturbing. I felt sick to my stomach as soon as I looked around.

“What is down there?” I could hear Kale yell down.

“It almost seems like a testing facility. It is gross.”

I looked in the cages and Kale then Ace slid down the latter. All of the pokemon were long gone. There were more pokemon there than I have ever seen. I could not tell what most of the pokemon were, they seemed like combinations of pokemon. I wanted to throw up. In fact I ran to the corner and did.

“This is the saddest thing I have ever seen,” Ace said.

Then I heard a faint cry from one of the cages. I looked inside to see a white colored Eevee. It looked perfectly normal, and the only pokemon that was still with us.

“Help, me,” Eevee cried. I pulled open the cage and pulled her out. I lifted here up into my arms and held her tight.

“It’s ok, you’re safe now,” I cooed to her.

“Please, let me into a pokeball so I can be safe,” she begged. I took out one of my remaining four pokeballs and touched her lightly with it. She went inside and I held her tight.

I just remembered what happened next in out dream! Look out!

I saw the lights go out and something hit me in the side. Everything got bigger and it went all black after a flash of read light.